You Have No Heart (Snippet Sunday 12.18.16)

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Where writers come together to share a few sentences (8-10) of their current project — whether it’s a recently released novel, a WIP (work in progress), or an older manuscript that’s being revived. Intended to hook readers, gather feedback and build an author’s fan base, Snippet Sunday is the FB group that does all three.

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December is upon us but I’m not at all ready for the snow and cold, I’m wishing we could skip it, as well as the holiday madness. But it’s the last month of 2016 so it better be the best one for it’s our last shot. Since one of my goals for this year was to finish Fated to Darkness — and NaNo still didn’t finish it — I’m hoping to finish it this final month. Which means I’m going to continue to share from it this month as motivation.

In last week’s snippet we learned there was a girl chained up in the cell Ciara dragged Heather into. This week’s snippet skips ahead just a couple paragraphs.

Now for the third peek at Chapter 8: Shifting Fear…

~*~*~*~

“Why are you hurting her?” Heather’s voice was timid and quiet within the dank cell, still unable to take her eyes off the girl on the ground.

Ciara’s gaze cut over to her, “Because, Heir, this is where your next lesson comes into play.”

That sentence must have grabbed the prisoner’s attention for she picked her head up with a mixture of shock and dread in her eyes to look at Heather. “Heir?” she breathed quietly. Seeing little Heather must have sparked a little bit of life in her because she snapped a disbelieving gaze tinged in sudden anger to Ciara next.

“She’s just a child!” she yelled. “Do you have no pity? No mercy at all? How can you be so evil?” Disgust crossed her features. “Did you hurt her too? Is that why she isn’t running or screaming for her parents? Is that–“

Ciara’s boot connecting with the girl’s face made her cut off her question, snapping her head to the side painfully. She cried out a little, sucking air in. Her hand moved to her face and when it came away from her mouth, Heather could see red blood glistening on it. The Dark One knelt down to the girl, grabbing her by her hair and yanking her head back painfully to glare at her.

“What part of do not speak, did we not understand?” she hissed, venom dripping off her words in a dark promise.

“You have no heart,” she spat back, clearly appalled that this woman would harm such a small child who looked no longer than five.

~*~*~*~

I guess in the wake of revelation and shock, all fear vanishes of the Dark One. Though…I doubt that’s going to end well for the girl.

Fated to Darkness Cover Final

Blurb:
Three year old Heather Fraeis is like every other normal toddler. With a loving family, a family dog, and a little bit spoiled.

But fate can be a twisted and cruel friend.

Kidnapped on the night of her fourth birthday by a woman clad in black, Heather is whisked away to a realm that has never been known to exist. Forced into a life she doesn’t want as her kidnapper’s Heir, she comes to find that monsters do in fact exist, nightmares are more than bad dreams, and magic is more than just the thing of fairy tales.

Lies, fear, secrets, and pain await her around every corner. Swallowed whole by the dark path laid out before her, she is forced to fall with no light at the end of the tunnel to give her hope. Until she meets a young boy that may change everything once more for her…

Can Heather defy all the odds and overcome who is she forced to become? Or will it be too late for her to rise above the fate laid before her?


This story is not yet on Wattpad because it is my baby that I hope to publish one day, and if no one will publish me, I am self publishing. But it’s also not on Wattpad because it’s in first draft phases yet. So there will be no “if you wish to read more…”

However! If you wish to read anything else that I have out for free, you can hop on over to  my profile on Wattpad and check out what I have to offer. Or if you wish to read my debut release, Embermyst, you can find out more about that in the tabs above. (I’m working on the tabs, bare with me.) I love to hear any and all feedback on my work as well. Comments are greatly appreciated, as are the reads. You can also find me on my Facebook author page to keep up to date with all that’s going on in my writing.

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9 thoughts on “You Have No Heart (Snippet Sunday 12.18.16)

  1. Great writing that builds terror. One suggestion is that at the end, you might want to change the pronoun “she” to “the prisoner” in the last line to denote a change in the speaker since the dialogue before it also uses she.

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    • Thank you.
      About the suggestion, this is all unedited yet. The only editing I do is when setting up the snippet to fix little mistakes — and some I still miss. The novel hasn’t seen a red pen just yet so things are a bit rough around the edges still but I’ll keep it in mind.

      Thank you, though, and thanks for reading. :)

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  2. Pingback: What’s Your Name? (Snippet Sunday 12.25.16) | Darkling Dreams

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