Snippet Sunday: February 22, 2015

Since I currently have a few works posted to Wattpad, I am going to start there with my snippets and give you all a peek at those before moving onto sharing bits and pieces of my current WiP novel.

This week’s snippet comes from the small, short horror piece I have posted to Wattpad titled The Black Lake. We are now out of the dream from last week’s snippet. And I am skipping ahead a couple of paragraphs. (Some sentences may have been creatively punctuated, and in the end I think this is actually eleven sentences instead of the ten limit. Oops.)

Trembling like a leaf, I ran my hands through my dampened hair, trying to calm myself down once more and get myself under control. I rested my elbows on my knees, pulling them close to my body for comfort and buried my face in my hands and hair.

The first few tears streaked quietly down my face and within the matter of a minute I was sobbing uncontrollably into my hands. When the tears finally subsided and my body stopped shuddering violently I stood up slowly, still leaning against the wall for support ,fearing that I might very well collapse again. I stood like that for awhile with my head resting against the cool wall, my eyes closed staring up at the bare ceiling without even seeing it.

Once again the haunting image of the man’s eyes and the woman’s dead, broken body passed across the back of my vision and my eyes snapped open. The image of man’s gaze left a mark that stayed with me, it had been dark that night with only the moonlight lighting the scene in front of me but somehow I had been able to see the color of the man’s eyes. They had been an unnatural green that you could get lost in with no possible escape. If it wasn’t the man’s eyes that bothered me it was the appearance of the girl that haunted me; the look of pure terror she had on her face was enough to send chills up and down my spine just thinking about it. And the amount of blood, bruises, and scratches that littered her body was enough to know that she had been through Hell on Earth. The overall scene was certainly enough to drive a sane and calm person into therapy for traumatic experiences.

The Black Lake Cover Final (Originally GD)

If you want to read the whole story, it is available to read on Wattpad! I love to hear any and all feedback on my work as well.

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32 thoughts on “Snippet Sunday: February 22, 2015

  1. Very interesting and haunting. I think you can cut out a few adverbs, and I spotted a few words echoing or contradicting each other, but that’s easy polish stuff. The content is good. ;)

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  2. Pingback: Snippet Sunday: March 1, 2015 | Darkling Dreams

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